The zaniness continues as D.J. tests the limits of my tolerance (and yours) with a complete disregard for the sanctity of a locked bathroom. Could this be the final straw or will D.J. tug at my heart or guitar strings to help make light of the situation?
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Tags: Bathroom, Comedy, D.J. Demers, Etiquette, Funny, George Panayotou, Recession, roommate, Screw You Recession
You need to learn how to trim the fat. Get your joke out with one shot, maybe two if needed. The intro is way way way too long, once you present the joke, move on, don’t pause on the joke and show it in five or six different shots. This is the biggest mistake amateurs seem to make.
Cut scenes and shots like a maniac and you’ll come out with a much better final product.
Ya I agree with your assessment, Steve. We definitely need to tighten it all up. I gotta talk to George, but I think we can shorten the intro like they always do with sitcoms. It is too long right now. Thanks for the feedback, and stay tuned as we hopefully get better.
Thanks for your feedback Steven. I was intending on trimming down the intro after the first couple of episodes, once I hoped people would become familiar with the show. On TV they keep to the regular intro all the time, but seeing as this is on the web, I don’t think the same applies; people just want to be thrown into the action. People’s suggestions can only make the show better. Stay tuned!